| Dear specific author, |
[Nov. 11th, 2009|05:12 pm] |
Commas do not a good replacement for periods make. You have them in there, but only at the ends of paragraphs. It's painful to read, to be honest. Please learn how to properly structure sentences.
ETA, because it annoyed me:
Dear HitsuHina author,
Matsumoto Rangiku isn't 'unimportant' or 'useless' to Hitsugaya. You claim she's never done anything good for him, ever? How about convincing him to become a Shinigami? You know, that thing that Hinamori couldn't do.
Also, Matsumoto can go without drinking if she feels like it. Just because she is shown drunk a few times, doesn't mean she is that way every hour of the day. She's also a competent fighter. A single ordinary Hollow isn't going to give a Lieutenant of her calibre any problems.
One last thing: Matsumoto and Hinamori are friends. They're not going to start verbally and physically attacking each other, whether directly or to their other friends, over Hitsugaya. Even if they did, I really doubt Hitsugaya would appreciate that behaviour enough to date the 'winner'.
No love,
Ansela
PS, Hinamori adored, possibly even loved, Aizen. That's an important part of her characterisation and she's not likely to dismiss it as 'trivial nonsense'. |
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| Dear Veronica Mars author, |
[Nov. 11th, 2009|11:34 am] |
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I am immensely enjoying your WIP. Despite having typos in every chapter, it is paced well, has a good mystery with plenty of action and your characters are 99% in character (which is pretty damn impressive). So why do you insist on calling her Ronnie? Logan only called her Ronnie once in canon, and that was a taunt. The only person who ever calls her Ronnie is Dick, and he's a sometimes-amusing jackass, who Veronica usually ignores.
Yet you have Logan referring to her as Ronnie constantly, even when thinking about her. It grates. Unless you're writing a pre-series where she's still Pink!Veronica and might answer to Ronnie, the only person who should be calling her that is Dick. She is not a Ronnie. She is a kick-ass PI named Veronica. You might notice it's even the title of the show, not Ronnie Mars.
You're by no means the only author that does this, but your fic is actually good, and I want to keep reading it. You ignored me when I diplomatically pointed this out to you, though, so there's not a lot I can do about it.
To paraphrase a quote from the end of S2, "My name is Veronica!" |
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| Why the secrecy? |
[Nov. 11th, 2009|07:01 am] |
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Okay, I love going through this comm. But the lack of identifying what fandom people are ranting about leaves me scratching my head. Granted I'm not involved in very many fandoms, but without knowing what it is, I find I feel like I missing out on a lot of what is being objected to/ranted about.
So why the secrecy? I would love to take part in discussions about what I know, but if I can't I identify with what is being said, I'm probably going to stay in lurker mode. |
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| Intro post |
[Nov. 11th, 2009|09:22 am] |
Okay, I just have to say, I'm really excited to find this community. After getting really frustrated yesterday doing searches on 'web development' + 'women' or 'computers' + 'women' and finding nothing I created my own community [name removed because I'm not trying to promote it here]. I created it with the idea of making a space for women working in a field where women are a minority. But I gotta say...this is so much better than that. It's nice to find a place where the geek girls have already congregated.
A little about me; I've been enrolled in a Bachelor's degree for web development for the last 4 years (going part-time as a nontraditional student). I love the thrill of programming something and having it *work* and I suffer through the excruciating agony of trying to make it work too. It's all part of programming right? I started out studying web dev being intimidated by the programming side of things and thinking I would probably end up on the picking colors side instead. WRONG!! I should have known from my apathetic wardrobe that colors are not really my thing. And I guess I should have had more faith in my own brainpower because it's served me just fine so far.
As a web dev I struggle a bit with how I see myself because outside of school I am, in some ways, not very geeky. I love studying herbalism, Reiki (which is hands-on healing), and training my horse. When I was younger I played video games on a regular basis, but I've given that up now that most of my free time is spent at the stable.
What has always been true is that I am curious about just about everything, from how to make a car run on rubbing alcohol (yes a friend and I tried that once) to how to shape a cardboard boat to stay afloat as long as possible. So yeah, I guess that qualifies me as a geek huh?
Anyhow, this community looks like a lot of *fun*!!! |
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| The genre was AU, not crackfic |
[Nov. 11th, 2009|02:56 pm] |
If two men get married it's okay if they both wear a suit. It is not required that one of them wears a dress.
That said, even if it is required that one of them wears a dress, I think Jack would object if Ianto wore the dress. |
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| Fic: A Tale of Two Sixes (2/6) |
[Nov. 11th, 2009|03:15 am] |
Title: 'A Tale of Two Sixes' (2/6)
Author: Semerket
Fandom: Battlestar Galactica / Star Trek Voyager crossover
Pairing: Seven of Nine/Six
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: I don't own any of it. I'm just borrowing them.
Summary: Circumstances bring a Cylon to Voyager. How will she adapt? AU all the way.
A/N: Wordcount: 6000. Previous chapters can be accessed from the link. As always, please review.
"the preferred option to alleviate said tension would be..." ... |
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| Your mileage may vary, here, but that was just not necessary and it wasn't even good. |
[Nov. 11th, 2009|12:44 am] |
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So, I was reading a fic for a fandom where the two most common pairings are AxB and CxD. Both are non-canon pairings, though they are established fanon. The fic in question, however, is my otp for the fandom, BxC, a relatively obscure pairing. The fic itself wasn't half bad. It was awkwardly worded in places, but it's a really, really old fic and the author was very new to writing at the time she wrote it so it didn't bother me so much.
Or, it didn't until the author broke the nice, comfortable flow of the fic to have C, who's POV it was written from, explain why he wasn't with D and why B was with him rather then A. Not only was this completly unnecessary, but it broke the mood and flow of the story, jarring me right out of the fic. It would have been forgivable if AxB or CxD were canon pairings, but they're not (regardless of how suggestive the official art is). They are fanon, and therefore don't require explaination of their breakup, and if one feels they really need to throw it in there, could you at least make sure it smoothly works into the story, not just "What about A and D you ask? Oh, they just weren't right for us!" |
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| Geography fail, among other things |
[Nov. 10th, 2009|08:53 pm] |
Dear Fangirl,
So you have this fic where Hero A and chaotic neutral Anti-Villain B (who in this fic is apparently now a hero? Wth did I miss something?) go on a desperate cross-country road trip together, pursued and dogged in their flight by Villain C and his teenage Henchwoman D (who in canon is kind of supposed to be dead but I digress).
The problems with your fic are as follows:
( I don't think Pennsylvania looks like that... )
No Love,
Me
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| (no subject) |
[Nov. 10th, 2009|08:14 pm] |
I know any review is a good review but...
Is it too much to ask that you spend the majority of your review discussing the story instead of bashing the plot and main pairing of the canon? I wouldn't be writing fic for this fandom if I didn't like the canon. I mostly write non-canon pairings, but a quick look at my journal would show I've made my peace with the canon ship. My journal isn't your personal soapbox. |
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| Persephone or Hades: Revolutionary Girl Utena Fic |
[Nov. 10th, 2009|05:42 pm] |
Author: Bitterfig Title: Persephone or Hades Fandom: Revolutionary Girl Utena Pairing: Utena/Anthy Summary: Utena dreamed that she wandered through an underworld of darkness and pain. Beta Reader: Fedink Word Count: 354 Rating: R Warning: Sexual content. Author’s Note: Written for the porn_battle prompt “Revolutionary Girl Utena, Utena/Anthy, pomegranates.” Disclaimer: This story is a work of fiction. Any illegal acts taking place within that fiction are NOT condoned by the author. Depictions of any questionable, illegal, or potentially illegal activity in said fiction does not mean that I condone, promote, support, participate in, or approve of said activity. I grasp the distinction between fiction and reality and trust that readers will do the same. I do not profit from the fan fiction I write, and all rights to the characters remain firmly in the hands of their creator.
Persephone or Hades |
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| (no subject) |
[Nov. 10th, 2009|11:20 am] |
This probably comes with a huge helping of YMMV.
Author, sweetie. I love your story. I really do. It's compelling, the characters are IC, the plot is a favorite of mine. But here's my problem: About 30 chapters into your epic, all of a sudden you change your tone, voice and point of view so that this one character can share this long and involved history. This history of his is in its own chapter and when copied to Word is 15 pages long. I have been jarred completely out of your story. I'm going to finish reading, but I'm insanely confused. I know you could have dropped this information throughout your story instead of devoting an entire chapter to an info dump. I know you could have handled the whole thing so much better than simply cramming all of it into one chapter in a different style, voice and point of view. If this random change of style/voice/pov/etc. was something consistent throughout your story, I'd forgive you. But it's not.
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| Two rants. |
[Nov. 10th, 2009|11:13 am] |
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1) McDex is extremely rare pairing. There’s age difference between them, experience difference, huge cultural difference. But the author for some reason is using main fandom pairing relationship dynamics (as in McShep) to describe her rare pairing relationship.
Funny thing is that if you try and insert Sheppard from the main pairing instead of Dex in the fic, nothing would change at all. Question: why bother with new and shiny pairing for this?
2) It’s somehow believable for 17-year-old to tell someone that he’s gay and that he already had sex of all kinds imaginable. And that his father oppressed and abused him for being gay. However, it’s not very convincing if that information comes to light in a small talk with person the teenager met fifteen minutes ago for the first time ever.
Edit for clarification. |
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